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A Penny for Your Thoughts
On 2007-03-05, Hans wrote:
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One thing I noticed, Vincent, is that some of the newer items are not as punchy or concise as the older ones. An example: Old element - A hermit priestess, practicing obscure deprivations. New element - A tempter devil, fond of luxury and sin, respecter of no law and every appetite, imprisoned until this very hour and minute within a stone crypt behind an old monk's garden. I'm not sure if all the extra words in the second element really add that much. Why a stone crypt? Why an old monk's garden? Wouldn't the following be just as good? Suggested element - A recently awakened tempter devil, fond of luxury and sin. Personally, one of the things I love about the oracle elements is their brevity; a quick evocative sentence that the players can take and run with. Is this a conscious change on your part, to add more details? |
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