thread: 2007-02-20 : Four Oracles
On 2007-03-05, Hans wrote:
One thing I noticed, Vincent, is that some of the newer items are not as punchy or concise as the older ones. An example:
Old element - A hermit priestess, practicing obscure deprivations.
New element - A tempter devil, fond of luxury and sin, respecter of no law and every appetite, imprisoned until this very hour and minute within a stone crypt behind an old monk's garden.
I'm not sure if all the extra words in the second element really add that much. Why a stone crypt? Why an old monk's garden? Wouldn't the following be just as good?
Suggested element - A recently awakened tempter devil, fond of luxury and sin.
Personally, one of the things I love about the oracle elements is their brevity; a quick evocative sentence that the players can take and run with.
Is this a conscious change on your part, to add more details?
